Thanks very much for your useful and helpful comment that you left on my own little writing blog. I’m grateful you took the time to give me feedback and I will try out the highlighter test you mentioned. Although I must ask if you further explain what you meants by a perfect ‘ly’ word and one that would need deleting or editing?
Sadly despite me having a degree in English Studies grammar and punctuation have always been my weakest points. Just didn’t learn enough about them when I was a child.

Anyway just thought I’d drop a friendly writerly hello, say thank you for noting and taking time with my work. I will add your blog to my Bloggers list and have a go at reading your work now. Your site looks awesome by the way. Wish mine was so professional.

Hope to hear from you soon.

Becky aka Valkyrie1008

Reply from Uninvoked Author: I loved your work, and I hope that many people click on your name here, or at the bottom of the intro page, and go read your fabulous story. As for the website–I’d love to take credit for it, but it’s just an awesome layout called Arras theme which you can get for yourself very easily. ^^

As for the suggestions I made, I purposefully did not tell you which adverbs I liked, and which ones I didn’t. The reason for this is I didn’t want my personal opinion to interfere with your work. I could do a line by line on your story, and tell you how each and every line would look if I wrote it, but then it would be my voice, and a piece of your writing would be lost. Trust your heart when evaluating each word. In the end you’ll know what to do.

Reply from Uninvoked Author: Every author loves that sort of compliment! Go get yourself a nice cup of coffee and come on back for more. ^^

Reply from Uninvoked Author: The intro is a lot better than it used to be. I took a query letter class, and part of it was learning how to summarize the novel. It took me a long time to convince the teacher I wanted harsh critiques, not just a pat on the back and a few simple changes.

I love the story and the pictures!